I really liked how clearly passionate you were about the non-profit you are creating. You were also very clear about what it is that you were creating after clearly explaining the problem, which was nicely done. The background noise from your location was a little distracting though. I did really like how you included statistics in your pitch because it showed you really did your research and know what you are talking about.
Dakota, You had a lot of energy and really got me excited about your company. If you were able to keep up this energy and enthusiasm for real investors it would be a huge benefit when they see how passionate you are about the project. You presented well and it looked like you prepared and knew what you were going to say.
Hi Dakota! I enjoyed your elevator pitch. You had great passion and great energy, and you obviously believe greatly in your idea. You memorized your pitch, which is also good. You mentioned statistics, showing you had done a great deal of research into your subject. You spoke loudly and clearly. A few small criticisms- there was a lot of background noise, which was distracting. I’m not quite sure what you are asking me to do. When you say, “join us,” do you mean provide services? Donations? Volunteer time? I still think your idea is too broad, and you might want to narrow your focus to one or two problems encountered by returning military personnel. You can always expand, as you gain resources, contacts, and experience. Overall, it’s a good idea, and your heart is in the right place, but you are only one person.
I really liked how clearly passionate you were about the non-profit you are creating. You were also very clear about what it is that you were creating after clearly explaining the problem, which was nicely done. The background noise from your location was a little distracting though. I did really like how you included statistics in your pitch because it showed you really did your research and know what you are talking about.
ReplyDeleteDakota,
ReplyDeleteYou had a lot of energy and really got me excited about your company. If you were able to keep up this energy and enthusiasm for real investors it would be a huge benefit when they see how passionate you are about the project. You presented well and it looked like you prepared and knew what you were going to say.
Hi Dakota!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your elevator pitch. You had great passion and great energy, and you obviously believe greatly in your idea. You memorized your pitch, which is also good. You mentioned statistics, showing you had done a great deal of research into your subject. You spoke loudly and clearly.
A few small criticisms- there was a lot of background noise, which was distracting. I’m not quite sure what you are asking me to do. When you say, “join us,” do you mean provide services? Donations? Volunteer time?
I still think your idea is too broad, and you might want to narrow your focus to one or two problems encountered by returning military personnel. You can always expand, as you gain resources, contacts, and experience. Overall, it’s a good idea, and your heart is in the right place, but you are only one person.